Read W-4 (Developing Paragraphs) in Little Seagull pages 17-29. This section presents strategies for (a) tightening an unfocused paragraph, (b) developing a claim and overall argument, and (c) smoothing out choppy or incoherent sentences. Please revise (or completely rewrite) two paragraphs based on your reading. Please document and share these changes along with the sections in W-4 that inspired you to make them. (You can take a “before and after” screen shot or cut-and-paste into your blog.)
Briefly summarize the changes you made and discuss how you feel these changes have affected your composition overall.