Considering my peers’ helpful feedback, I’ve decided that my main goal will be to clarify my arguments and simplify the presentation of those arguments throughout my essay. To accomplish this, I will focus on breaking up run-on sentences and fixing any grammatical errors. I will attempt to clarify and condense my essay by switching some of the semicolons to periods, and by eliminating any redundant elaborations. Additionally, I will revisit the first and last sentences of each paragraph to try to improve the transitions between various ideas. My biggest challenge will be distinguishing between the ideas that I should keep in my essay versus the ones that I should relocate to more relevant places, or even cut out entirely.